I actually really like this. It is not a realistic HDR at all, but that clearly isn't the look that you were going for. The composition, the sky, and the unnatural HDR effect gives this a very artsy feel which I'm digging here.
thank you for your comments!
i used photomatix first to generate the hdr file, and then photoshop to delete most of the background, create the clouds and play with saturation and contrast.