Need some C&C please. B&W Beauty.

[Tulsa]

Hope this picture is ok, no nudity, just boob coverup, I am not a portrait guy, so I really need some C&C on these. What could I have done differently?

This one, for some reason, I cannot go back and adjust to max white. I wanted the dark look, too much?

 

[cameramike]

In both a hair light would have helped, especially the second one to just give a little definition to her hair. The first one doesn't do much for me neither expressions are saying anything, the guys is bland and hers is just a smile, she could have been clothed and the same feeling would be given, now had she was looking up at him biting her lip with her other hand on his head sort of pulling it towards her, the feeling would be totally different.

The second one the lighting on her face is excellent but again the hair is lost right above her forehead. Focal length for the first one is a little wide you don't want to distort a woman's body even taking a step or two back may have helped. Over all good work just play with lighting if you can.