Off camera light C&C plz

[minister]

Hi,
I am learning the off the camera flash technique , here are my some shot's please comment ,

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[Dominantly]

#5 makes me go a bit cross eyed. I find the shadows a bit too intense and wonder what the image would look like if you could shoot it up from below the white surface.\

#4 I would level out the white surface as it's currently angled down to the right, I would also remove whatever that ledge is in the back. I would also try to shoot through the bottom, with maybe a white reflector up top pointed down to capture some of the fall out to reflect back down.

#2 I like the idea, maybe have the bright light focused where the filament is in the bulb, which is where I anticipate the brightest part of the bulb to be.

#1 I would just level it out.


Not sure why I went in reverse order..

 

[minister]

thank's for the valuable suggestions , why did't you give any comment on first one ? is it that bad , It took me 20 shot's to capture this single splash