past senior re-edit

[CorrieMichael]

Past senior re-edit....what do you think? composition C&C welcome as well

 

[tirediron]

Not really feeling it; there's just way too much empty space image right for my taste. I think if you cropped vertically through the 'm' in your watermark the image would be more balanced and visually pleasing.

 

[amolitor]

I have to say that, as a dude, I look at this and the first and pretty much only thing I see if "my word, she's... ample." which is all about the posing.

 

[KmH]

Can we see the before the re-edit version?

No doubt, the subject scale in the frame reducing practice of shooting tall narrow subjects, like people, with a horizontal frame has become a standard retail photographer offering.
Despite the fact that from an artistic perspective it makes little sense to have that much negative space in the image frame.
However, using the negative space for advertising purposes does make sense. But how many customers would hang the image on the wall with the advertising still in place?

I would have done some editing under her right eye to minimize the bag and the shadow it casts, and I would have brightened her sclera a tad more.

 

[Derrel]

Can we see the before the re-edit version?

No doubt, the subject scale in the frame reducing practice of shooting tall narrow subjects, like people, with a horizontal frame has become a standard retail photographer offering.
Despite the fact that from an artistic perspective it makes little sense to have that much negative space in the image frame.
However, using the negative space for advertising purposes does make sense. But how many customers would hang the image on the wall with the advertising still in place?

I would have done some editing under her right eye to minimize the bag and the shadow it casts, and I would have brightened her sclera a tad more.

The above post by KmH is a very polite way of saying that this framing and composition looks very low-end retail shooter-like. I will be more blunt: this is an awful pose and awful framing. It looks like a totally unstudied novice shot it. It looks very unprofessional. Sorry, but it does. I have visual taste and sophistication, honed over decades of making photographs and looking at and evaluating photographs. I cannot look at a portrait like this and think anything positive about it. The girl's attractive enough, but her pose is horrible. She's cut off weirdly, casts a huge shadow, and most of the frame is empty, and she's riding wayyyyyyyyyyy low in the frame with a HUGE amount of dead, empty space above her head. This looks like a snapshot.

 

[CorrieMichael]

what about this one

 

[CorrieMichael]

Can we see the before the re-edit version?

No doubt, the subject scale in the frame reducing practice of shooting tall narrow subjects, like people, with a horizontal frame has become a standard retail photographer offering.
Despite the fact that from an artistic perspective it makes little sense to have that much negative space in the image frame.
However, using the negative space for advertising purposes does make sense. But how many customers would hang the image on the wall with the advertising still in place?

I would have done some editing under her right eye to minimize the bag and the shadow it casts, and I would have brightened her sclera a tad more.

The above post by KmH is a very polite way of saying that this framing and composition looks very low-end retail shooter-like. I will be more blunt: this is an awful pose and awful framing. It looks like a totally unstudied novice shot it. It looks very unprofessional. Sorry, but it does. I have visual taste and sophistication, honed over decades of making photographs and looking at and evaluating photographs. I cannot look at a portrait like this and think anything positive about it. The girl's attractive enough, but her pose is horrible. She's cut off weirdly, casts a huge shadow, and most of the frame is empty, and she's riding wayyyyyyyyyyy low in the frame with a HUGE amount of dead, empty space above her head. This looks like a snapshot.

unfortunate for me ......... i actually wanted the bright blown out area on the dumpster she is leaning on there.....i placed her in my frame that way so that i could get that feeling of the sunset. i actually darkened the shadow..................i love it there.......i think it adds more to the story of light................... ack~! yet another miss for me.....lol..............so essentially all of the things i did intentionally..................i get a complete fail on lol ah well better luck next time!

 

[Tee]

In the first, I like the open space but the bottom crop draws the eyes to her chest which, in the context of this image, is not what I think you're going for. Image #2- love!

 

[lennon33x]

What camera/lens setup were you using for #1?