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mmaria

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I've just set up my website.

Would you please take a look and give me your comments.

Here are some questions for you:
- Is it simple, easy to navigate, manageable?
- Is the theme ok?
-There are 6 pages there, would it be too much if I add "Travel" "Blackandwhite or something like that" page? Or that's really not necessary?
- Do I have enough of work on the site, for people to be clear about my abilities?
- How can I improve it?
- Do you have any of plugins to recommend for a photography website?
- And do you have anything else to say, good or bad?

I know I need to change the picture of myself, I need a new one... I'll do it soon.
Also... there are background colors behind my name, and they show up when something is loading a bit longer, ugly yellow and ugly blue... haven't figure out how to get rid of them yet... but I'll get rid of them for sure

And thank you!
I need to hear you guys here first, before I go public with it :)

Here's the link www.marijasmanja.com
 
Looks good on the technical side; it's quick, easy to navigate and simply laid out. I don't have my 'phone handy ATM, so I can't check it for mobile device responsiveness. My only suggestion is, given the darker look of many of your images, have you thought of a white/lighter background? I found that many seemed to 'bleed' into the dark page background.
 
I agree with tireiron. It just felt too dark. Otherwise easy to browse.
 
One thing I really like on websites, especially photo sites are slideshows. Maybe just because I would hate for ONE image to sum up everything I do and be the main focus of my photography. So I always pick my top favorites and use like 6-10 photos and change them out a couple times a year.

I agree with the color suggestion also.

Also your logo seems blocky, like it was just plopped there. Maybe change the background color to match the bg color of your logo so it all blends?


-Sean
 
Good job! One of the most-cohesive collections of images I've seen on a site in a very long time. Your visual style comes through extremely well. The photos showcase your style, front and center. Many web sites appear scattershot and all over the place--but not yours. DO you need more shots on there? I really think the number you have is close to perfect, and better to leave to the imagination a little bit rather than to have too much overload. I'm not keen on seeing how you would shoot Travel...that just does not seem like it would pay you back much, since the way the sire is n ow, it really looks like you are an Artist, a person with a strong visual sense, a strong sense of style.
 
If you do any slideshows make sure you script them and avoid flash if you want Apple products to work.
On mobile, the banner blocks the navigation and you are stuck on the index page.
 
Looks great on my iphone.

Well done.
 
Nice site, It looks like it will become something to be proud of when you are done with it.

There are a couple of things about the site you may want to address, I listed them below.
Also I noticed the get in touch page has a different file name than the page name.
I see you used Yoast 3.2.3, you might consider doing the SEO yourself for a better result as was mentioned above, register it with Bing and Google at a minimum. Make sure robots and spiders are enabled.

Also I can't help but wonder why you are using HTML and not HTML5 for building this site.

When you are done making the site, be sure to view it in Oprah, Firefox, Safari, Chrome, IE (versions 5-10) and Edge. If you are enterprising you can also check it with Torch, Maxthon, Sea Monkey, Avant Browser, and Deepnet. There probably isn't any point in going into the lesser known browsers at this time so I won't list them all.
Viewing it in all popular browsers will ensure that your visitors don't get any unexpected surprises.

It's also a good idea to build the entire site a second time for tablets and then one more time for phones as the size differences will allow you to create a look for each display size that is optimized for that size. I't easier than it sounds, just create duplicate pages and rename them, then re-size and reorder the content.

You can find a lot of information at W3C.org including tutorials, lessons, and examples of how to write the code.

Good luck in creating your site and making it great. It's a lot of fun to build sites and even more fun to learn new things.

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    Page (Faceless)
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    Page (Meet Me)
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    Page (Contact) Link: Get in Touch
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Looks good on the technical side; it's quick, easy to navigate and simply laid out. I don't have my 'phone handy ATM, so I can't check it for mobile device responsiveness. My only suggestion is, given the darker look of many of your images, have you thought of a white/lighter background? I found that many seemed to 'bleed' into the dark page background.

I agree with tireiron. It just felt too dark. Otherwise easy to browse.
I understand what you're saying about the lighter bg. and i was just thinking the same but I've just tried white background and it doesn't feel right at all. I'm quite surprised that it doesn't look better tbh.
Many of the pictures looks "washed out", colors don't pop at all

Thank you!
 
One thing I really like on websites, especially photo sites are slideshows. Maybe just because I would hate for ONE image to sum up everything I do and be the main focus of my photography. So I always pick my top favorites and use like 6-10 photos and change them out a couple times a year.

I agree with the color suggestion also.

Also your logo seems blocky, like it was just plopped there. Maybe change the background color to match the bg color of your logo so it all blends?


-Sean
I'll see about slideshows later, when I get accustomed to the site and start playing with it. There are many plugins there and I think this theme has also slideshows in options but I'll see that later on, when I feel I should do something more, maybe when I have more work to show.
I personally don't like slideshows that much because I don't have the control of time when viewing images.

I replied on color suggestion above.

I've just did that bg thing with my logo and thank you for that. It looks much much better now.
 
Good job! One of the most-cohesive collections of images I've seen on a site in a very long time. Your visual style comes through extremely well. The photos showcase your style, front and center. Many web sites appear scattershot and all over the place--but not yours.
Among technicalities that are important of course, I wanted to hear about the other element, about how all looks like presented this way, and how I come across or how I presented what I do... you answered me what I wanted to know.

DO you need more shots on there? I really think the number you have is close to perfect, and better to leave to the imagination a little bit rather than to have too much overload.
I am afraid of overloading the site with the work, and I wanted to be an optimum number 6-8 images. Thanks for addressing that too.

I'm not keen on seeing how you would shoot Travel...that just does not seem like it would pay you back much,
yeah... I was suspicious about that and you clarified it. I understand.

since the way the sire is n ow, it really looks like you are an Artist, a person with a strong visual sense, a strong sense of style.
that's something I want to achieve with my presentation.
Thank you for saying all of this!
 
Looks great on my iphone.

Well done.
I'm aware that it isn't perfect but for someone that doesn't have much knowledge about websites this is a huge compliment :)
 
It's really a very nice start, well done, but your website is missing a very important element: metatags.
You want your website to be found by search engines, so you need to make metatags
huh... I'm aware of tagging photos and I'll do that in a few days when I sort out everything, but I've just googled "metatags" and I have no idea what are they... actually I understand what are they for but don't know how to do/write or implement them.

I have a blog, it's still active but I'm not active on it. I have the most basic understanding of things you have to know/do with a website... just to be noted :)

and furthermore it's good to have your website verified by Google!
Never heard of that, just googled it and it seem like something I could do by myself and I'll definitely do it when I finish the website.

Your website has a lot of "css text" which makes your website a bit slow while changing webpages, things like "css" is usually made into a link and stored at an other part of the webspace, all is done to make a website faster.(but this is much less important than metatags etc.)
I noticed slower changing pages but don't have a clue about css links you mentioned

For me the photogallery does not need twice a button "forwards" and a button "backwards"
Two buttons to go with the thumbnails is fine, but 2 buttons extra to go with the bigger images is not needed, imo, or try vice versa: big images with buttons, not the thumbnails.
A nice solution could be to make these extra 2 buttons transparant ( .png images) so you get less pronounced webpages filled with - just a bit too big and too much - buttons (when shown in mobile version), but like I say, this is only my opinion!
they're gone
.

ps. I have no trouble with the navigation, it shows well and can be used normally!
That's good.

Thank you!
 
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If you do any slideshows make sure you script them and avoid flash if you want Apple products to work.
On mobile, the banner blocks the navigation and you are stuck on the index page.
ok.
On mobile, the menu is in the upper left corner. But the banner cut the front page unfortunately

Nice site, It looks like it will become something to be proud of when you are done with it.

There are a couple of things about the site you may want to address, I listed them below.
Also I noticed the get in touch page has a different file name than the page name.
It's my fault entirely. I made page "Contact" at firts and then changed it to "Get in touch" but forgot to change the permalink

I see you used Yoast 3.2.3, you might consider doing the SEO yourself for a better result as was mentioned above, register it with Bing and Google at a minimum. Make sure robots and spiders are enabled.
I installed Yoast, but haven't done anything there so far.. I'll do it. I'll register it.
Also I can't help but wonder why you are using HTML and not HTML5 for building this site.
The theme is older, that much I know


When you are done making the site, be sure to view it in Oprah, Firefox, Safari, Chrome, IE (versions 5-10) and Edge. If you are enterprising you can also check it with Torch, Maxthon, Sea Monkey, Avant Browser, and Deepnet. There probably isn't any point in going into the lesser known browsers at this time so I won't list them all.
Viewing it in all popular browsers will ensure that your visitors don't get any unexpected surprises.
I will


It's also a good idea to build the entire site a second time for tablets and then one more time for phones as the size differences will allow you to create a look for each display size that is optimized for that size. I't easier than it sounds, just create duplicate pages and rename them, then re-size and reorder the content.

You can find a lot of information at W3C.org including tutorials, lessons, and examples of how to write the code.

Good luck in creating your site and making it great. It's a lot of fun to build sites and even more fun to learn new things.

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<link href='http://fonts.googleapis.com/css?family=Euphoria Script:regular&subset=latin,latin-ext' rel='stylesheet' type='text/css'/>↩

Syntax of URL:
Any URL. For example: /hello, #canvas, or Welcome to nginx!. Characters should be represented in NFC and spaces should be escaped as %20. Common non-alphanumeric characters other than ! $ & ' ( ) * + - . / : ; = ? @ _ ~ generally must be percent-encoded. For example, the pipe character (|) must be encoded as %7C.

Page (Untold)
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    <link href='http://fonts.googleapis.com/css?family=Euphoria Script:regular&subset=latin,latin-ext' rel='stylesheet' type='text/css'/>↩

    Syntax of URL:
    Any URL. For example: /hello, #canvas, or Welcome to nginx!. Characters should be represented in NFC and spaces should be escaped as %20. Common non-alphanumeric characters other than ! $ & ' ( ) * + - . / : ; = ? @ _ ~ generally must be percent-encoded. For example, the pipe character (|) must be encoded as %7C.
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    Page (Faceless)
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    Page (Meet Me)
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    Page (Contact) Link: Get in Touch
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I'm sorry you spent some time on this but I really have no idea about what you're talking about here. I have no clue.

My friend helped me with some things I really couldn't figure out but, tbh I'm pretty satisfied with what I achieved by myself, considering that I don't know anything about building websites.

Thank you, I appreciate everything you said and I'll do things I can such as registering the site
 
Nice. I think having a rather small number of photos works well (and I agree about changing them out periodically to update and keep it fresh).

I might think about combining Untold and Faceless (or maybe try another name for Faceless although I can't think of one) and keep the standard Portraits. Then maybe add a Travel/Landscape/Scenery section? or whatever you want to call it (another creative name like Untold would be interesting). I'm thinking that because you mention in your bio that it's beautiful where you live, you might want to show that.

I'd do some editing of your bio under Meet Me (some of this might be due to language differences). I'd title the sections using nouns and change Documenting (a verb) to Documentary (noun or adjective). You could get on the Merriam-Webster dictionary site and look up synonyms (like truth for documentary, etc.).

OK, this is turning into an English class lesson, lol so we might need to go get Lenny, and there's not necessarily a right or wrong in editing, but here are my suggestions.

"Photography is almost easy when you have such incredible locations." (Delete 'to shoot on')

"I enjoy different types of photography because of the challenges they bring," (delete 'along') ... "but the thing I like most about photography is that no matter how hard I try, ..." (Keep the rest of the sentence. I deleted 'the' twice, and omitted a comma after 'that'.)

Next paragraph starting after 'honest emotions' -
... "if they see a captured piece of a soul, a moment of someone's true happiness or sadness, or a story that's waiting to be told." (I deleted 'on it' - I think you meant 'in it', which seems redundant, and deleted a comma and inserted 'or'.)

Next paragraph, starting after ... 'you like what I do' - ..."want to collaborate with me, or hire me;"... (I added a semicolon). Then later in that sentence after "my site" there should be another semicolon.

Looks good overall Maria. And on second thought, don't ask Lenny anything til the end of the semester! lol

(And I liked that phrase 'captured piece of a soul'.)
 
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