The top part above the umbrella is really blown out. You may be able to PS it and tone it down a bit. I think it needs a lot of work in the contrast area, and composisiton as well. The umbrella pole being right in the center of the face takes away from the person a lot. Has an interesting feel to it, but I think it needs some work. Play around with it in PS or some kind of program and see what you come up with