Great concept....... but my opinion is that your eye should be in focus. If your goal for this shot is for the ear phones and a partial face are to be in forcus you need a better aperture (higher) or step back from the subject. Also the white balance picks up too much red tones. There are a few hot spots from your flash. The black hair blends a little too much with the background and doesn't show enough depth.
Over all I like the concept and composition ......if it was just a bit clearer.
Maybe sometime I will try taking it again.
I actually used a desklamp for my lighting, I dont like using the on camera flash.
And I never realized how much my eye was out of focus compared to the headphone until you pointed that out.