Thika - Thai bikini at my pool - Your C&C requested!

Trever1t · Feb 27, 2017

You've seen her before, old frame just retouched this morning. Would love to hear your thoughts, what I could focus on (see what I did there?) to improve. I'd really like to take my work up a notch!

_POR1553-Edit by Bill Grayson, on Flickr

itsjustbreality · Feb 27, 2017

I think this looks great! Beautiful bokeh.
The only tiny thing that stuck out to me is the color of the hand resting on her hip seems a little off or maybe a little too pink for the rest of her? It almost makes her tan seem like it stops abruptly at her wrist.(I'm not sure if this is due to editing or just the way her skin is). Again just a tiny thing but this looks beautiful to me!

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Donde · Feb 27, 2017

Top notch as always, lighting focus background etc. Maybe a tall order but if it were mine I'd want clone out the gray poolside intersecting with her leg.

dasmith232 · Feb 27, 2017

Speaking of lines, the only thing that caught my eye for "improvement" is the line that goes through her head. Otherwise, nicely done.

Trever1t · Feb 27, 2017

dasmith232 said:
Speaking of lines, the only thing that caught my eye for "improvement" is the line that goes through her head. Otherwise, nicely done.

Just the top of her head!

Thanks all, keep it coming!

Granddad · Feb 27, 2017

You've still got it. :encouragement:

The only thing I'd add is that with her teeth the way they show I get an impression that mumbles quietly "vampire". I personally would consider rounding off her eye teeth (canines) just a fraction.

dasmith232 · Feb 27, 2017

Granddad said:
... The only thing I'd add is that with her teeth the way they show I get an impression that mumbles quietly "vampire". ...

Okay, so it wasn't just me! I was worried...

DarkShadow · Feb 27, 2017

Ok the first thing that caught my eyes is I can't see all of the tattoos under the top and below the panty line so next time maybe we can lose them..sorry thats all I got other then gorgeous and I hate you.LOL

Trever1t · Feb 27, 2017

She does have some big white teeth doesn't she!

JoeW · Feb 27, 2017

Lovely model, nice pose, gorgeous shot. My comments:

1. I'm fine with the diagonal line of the side of the pool. However, the white line going through the top of her head does bother me. Cloning it out would be my advice.

2. I wish there was just a little more separation between the background and her hair. Maybe it's my computer settings, but the hair seems to fade in to the background a bit.

3. Right hand does seem out of color unnaturally. Could just be from holding a pose....or some sunburn. But I did notice it.

Otherwise, I think this is terrific. Very well done sir.

Trever1t · Feb 27, 2017

I can't see the hand color issue? Looking on my PC/laptop/iPad...looks normal to me? Weird. It would have to be something with the light, AB800/BD as she's artificially lit and naturally backlit.

Thanks again!

FITBMX · Feb 27, 2017

I don't think I can help much, you know so much more than me in the area. But I think it would look a little better more backlight, maybe.

DanOstergren · Feb 28, 2017

As always I just love your choice in models. This is really well done. My only suggestion would be to perhaps increase the color temperature; I feel like it's too cool for a pool shot and makes me think the pool must be cold (although I'm currently in a very cold room, so I may be feeling biased).