gusandgloria
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I've written some books on photographic composition and design and I have some input on this photograph. I know I'm new here but not at all to the world of image-building. I have about 40 years under my belt.
Yes this composition misses, IMHO. I completely get what the artist was trying to do with this unusual, tight (and striking) composition, and it was a beautiful attempt, but it misses, regardless of the beauty or lack of beauty in the model. The eye is way too close to the top edge and she looks stuffed in the frame. This is a little unsettling and in direct opposition to the peaceful, at-ease expression on her face. She looks very serene, but she's all cramped in there. Awkward, IMO.
Color may have improved this somewhat. The value range is narrow ... why b/w? You would usually choose b/w if you want low-key, or if you have a lot of values (lights/darks) or textures to show off. The only textures in this image are the wrinkles in her shirt and her hair, and the lack of color does nothing for either. Her skin looks beautiful, and with that cleavage 'a little sexy' was clearly the intent. So why grey skin? Again, I see no reason for b/w because of the lack of value range and lack of textures. It almost looks a low-key effort -- but then her face is really light so it's not *really* a low-key image. I just don't get the b/w choice is all.
As a painter I like the title of this. It's perfect. I'm sorry if this isn't the feedback you were looking for. Try it again in color with a better blouse and a little bit lower in the frame and you have a gorgeous shot. Photography is about the journey .....
Yes this composition misses, IMHO. I completely get what the artist was trying to do with this unusual, tight (and striking) composition, and it was a beautiful attempt, but it misses, regardless of the beauty or lack of beauty in the model. The eye is way too close to the top edge and she looks stuffed in the frame. This is a little unsettling and in direct opposition to the peaceful, at-ease expression on her face. She looks very serene, but she's all cramped in there. Awkward, IMO.
Color may have improved this somewhat. The value range is narrow ... why b/w? You would usually choose b/w if you want low-key, or if you have a lot of values (lights/darks) or textures to show off. The only textures in this image are the wrinkles in her shirt and her hair, and the lack of color does nothing for either. Her skin looks beautiful, and with that cleavage 'a little sexy' was clearly the intent. So why grey skin? Again, I see no reason for b/w because of the lack of value range and lack of textures. It almost looks a low-key effort -- but then her face is really light so it's not *really* a low-key image. I just don't get the b/w choice is all.
As a painter I like the title of this. It's perfect. I'm sorry if this isn't the feedback you were looking for. Try it again in color with a better blouse and a little bit lower in the frame and you have a gorgeous shot. Photography is about the journey .....