What do you think? Yes or NO? C&C please

CorrieMichael · Sep 5, 2013

I did this senior session and while on location walked by this glass indoor thingy that people wait in for the elevator.....stopped took a shot and thought hmm.....so thought we would be a bit creative and put her in there......what do you think? Does this work or no? In image 1 I couldn't do portrait because the actual glass stopped where I cut her leg off....there was a cement bottom part.
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Derrel · Sep 5, 2013

Yes. I like it.

manicmike · Sep 5, 2013

I really like the second one. The first one, the rail through the middle kind of bugs me, but I still think it works.

C4n0n.Fan · Sep 5, 2013

The rail and the reflections. Might be worth another try though.

TreeofLifeStairs · Sep 5, 2013

I think the reflections are fine but the rail was the first thing that distracted me from the subject. I really like the light. Good creative shot overall though.

texkam · Sep 5, 2013

It's a look. What say you, the artist?

Gavjenks · Sep 5, 2013

That rail is horrible. Just takes up all my attention and I don't pay attention to the model at all. Nor does it lend any conceptual benefit to make this drawback worthwhile.

The second photo is really nice. Great colors and lighting and mood, although it'd be nice if she looked happier.

texkam · Sep 6, 2013

Regarding #1, I was holding off on my comments waiting to hear from the OP. I was interested to hear why she felt compelled to put up an image that is so flawed from a technical standpoint. Corrie, you obviously saw something in this image that compelled you to process it up and post it. Maybe it was obvious or subliminal, but you must have felt something was going on here. Yes, virtually everything about it from a technical standpoint is wrong starting with that window pane, but sometimes photography is not just about the technical stuff. Yes the rail grabs your attention. That's the idea. It strongly puts her in and keeps you, the viewer out. Look at the young lady's face. It tells a story of isolation. She's not looking at you. She's not looking at her instrument. She is far off. She and her thoughts are alone. You the viewer are simply looking into a moment in her world. Look how wonderfully that visual cut out in the washed out area frames her face. Personally I think photo is shear brilliance. What a wonderful capture and a portfolio piece IMHO.

kathyt · Sep 6, 2013

texkam said:
Regarding #1, I was holding off on my comments waiting to hear from the OP. I was interested to hear why she felt compelled to put up an image that is so flawed from a technical standpoint. Corrie, you obviously saw something in this image that compelled you to process it up and post it. Maybe it was obvious or subliminal, but you must have felt something was going on here. Yes, virtually everything about it from a technical standpoint is wrong starting with that window pane, but sometimes photography is not just about the technical stuff. Yes the rail grabs your attention. That's the idea. It strongly puts her in and keeps you, the viewer out. Look at the young lady's face. It tells a story of isolation. She's not looking at you. She's not looking at her instrument. She is far off. She and her thoughts are alone. You the viewer are simply looking into a moment in her world. Look how wonderfully that visual cut out in the washed out area frames her face. Personally I think photo is shear brilliance. What a wonderful capture and a portfolio piece IMHO.

Kind of agree, except that in order to make this work there needs to be some element of technical cohesion. Her foot is cut off, my eye goes there first, and she is too centered. The exposure is a little on the bright side as well. If you were to reshoot this with a little more thought behind it, I think you would be onto something. Go later in the day or block out some of that light, because the second one looks like she is wearing an elbow pad.

I am seeing a lot of growth in your work Corrie. I would love to see her full reflection in the second shot too. That would be a nice element.

Ilovemycam · Sep 6, 2013

I like 2

CorrieMichael · Sep 6, 2013

I completely agree there are some fundamental/technical "mistakes" in the first image. However the feeling of the moment and emotion that it conjured was what made it work for me. If I am going to be VERY honest.....there are two things that bother me about the first photo.....the foot being cut off, and the bar on the outside of the glass enclosure. The light does not bother me at all anything hot or too bright in this photo is not any concern to me.....I understand nothing should be blown....I know....I get it......but I LOVE light, and playing with light. If some things are blown in my photos that aren't actually affecting a face etc. I am okay with that, it adds to the ambiance of my photos for me

again as long as it's not on the face....then that would bother me. in the first photo there isn't much in the way I can change it though to still have me outside of the glass and her in it. I wanted it to look like no one was there.....like the picture wasn't suppose to be taken.......so I guess with that thought in mind it was okay for me to process as is because it wasn't really an image planned on technical but rather an emotion and moment that I saw. I opened the door and was holding the door with my foot on the second image because as I reviewed my photos I realized that this (the outside of the glass shot) may not have worked. So thought I better make use of the situation for some variety and the light (for me) was fabulous in there so thought I would get a little closer I did do a portrait with the door open to try not to cut off her arm and hand so that you could see her hand actually on the guitar but the orientation and composition was still better (for me and my eye) in the crop I have submitted in 2. I think sometimes I get caught up in emotions when I photograph and they lead me in my photos as I click....sometimes that can be very bad ie: the flaws in 1, and sometimes it works out to my benefit.