A few of the girl friend

[Dillard]

Had the chance to play around with my new remote triggers earlier today. Unfortunately the speed light/softbox brackets have yet to arrive, so I was limited with what I could do. All c&c are welcome!

 

[murklemark]

First picture looks good, nice colour and focus. I like the framing of the train tracks in the second one, looks a little weird to cut her legs off at the knee, and more train track in the lower portion of the frame could of created a more dramatic leading line upto the subject, the red dress looks great against the darker background.

 

[DiskoJoe]

First one is good. The soft box will give it the extra it needs.

 

[michael9000000]

I like both photos, generally speaking, and your girlfriend is very photogenic. I'd like to offer the following bits of constructive criticism...

In the first photo, there is way too much backlight, especially since your girlfriend seems to be sitting in the shade. I know you are waiting on your speedlight and softbox, but in the meantime, try the same shot about an hour before sunset. If the sun is behind her, you can try reflecting the natural light available onto your girlfriend's skin. If you don't have a reflector, then anything large, flat, white, and reflective will work in a pinch... I've always found that styrofoam does the trick nicely if you can get your hands on it. With the right reflective angle, you can add a nice bit of brightness and glow to your subject's skin and hair. You can also try spot metering on her skin... The background might get blown out, but at least your girlfriend's skin will be properly metered. Speaking of skin, be careful of skin tone when shooting in the shade... The skin can take on a tone of the nearest reflective surface... In the case of photo 1, the wooden deck (and perhaps the pinkish/purplish dress) has cast a bluish tint to your girlfriend's skin... If you don't see it immediately, compare her skin tone from photo 1 (bluish) to photo 2 (quite nice and natural). If you have not yet learned how to set custom white balance with a grey/white card, it would be a great thing for you to discover. With the proper custom white balance, your photo, and most importantly, your girlfriend's skin, will have a very natural and neutral hue. You'll then have a clean canvas to work with if you want to add warmth in post production. I have one more thing to say about photo 1... I think the framing is a little bit off... Your girlfriend's pose is very nice and natural, and her legs drew my eyes to the lower left of the photo... That's good... What's not so good, in my humble opinion, is the extra dead space on the right of the photo.

Photo 2 is nice... It's very nice, in fact. I agree with Murklemark's about the train tracks and the cut-off legs, but all in all, it's a very nice photo. Just a thought... One of your girlfriend's most striking features is her hair. You might consider casting some light on it to bring out more highlights and shine.

Thanks for sharing!

 

[slackercruster]

Purdy girl...lucky guy.


Keep blasting away and send in more!

 

[Tee]

Not a fan of the first one: dirty soles, locked elbows and the leading line up her thighs to her face doesn't work for me. Perhaps a slight turn of the body and a bend of the knee would be better. For the second image, having her stand off to the side of the tracks and a lower stance to bring out the lines of the track. All in all, you have a great subject to practice on and the flash will help with the fill.

 

[Awiserbud]

I think i would echo what everyone else has already said, the top one is the best of the 2 IMO, but i would have perhaps liked to have seen a slightly deeper DOF, her out of focus feet dont look right for some reason and since the backdrop is so far away you could have opened the aperture a little more to keep the whole subject in focus and still keep her isolated from the background.
Nice model though, very pretty smile.

 

[Ron Evers]

#1 a bad pose that make her legs look oversize. Legs to the side would keep the proportions in balance.

 

[Ysarex89 83]

My I suggest you avoid the train tracks in the future -- model on the tracks is the definition of cliche.

In the first photo your white balance is way off and she's seriously blue. She's also too dark -- with that backlight behind her you need forward fill. And you want to remove the CA around her -- most obvious around her feet and legs.

Joe

 

[ColorExperts]

Second picture is really awesome !!

 

[thetrue]

Hmmm, I wonder when the last time the OP was on, since he started this thread back in May...

 

[texkam]

Perhaps he was hit by a train.

 

[thetrue]

Perhaps he was hit by a train.

You have an interesting sense of humor.

 

[Tee]

Hmmm, I wonder when the last time the OP was on, since he started this thread back in May...

Wow, I didn't even catch that. It appears that I would be the one to revive this thread but I swear I didn't. This thread was on my new posts of the day tab. Did a mod delete a post before me?

 

[thetrue]

Yes'm something spammy that I reported lol