Not bad fora first go at all! I'd say you could have reduced it by maybe 1/3 stop; the specular highlights on the cheek and forehead are just a tad hot, but nothing major, and next time, I'd suggest raising the lights; notice the position of the catchlights is around 8.00 o'clock; typically we like to get that up to the 10.00 o'clock-ish position. A couple of general points: Remember, your camera will work just when turned 90 degrees (shoot portraits in portrait aspect), and whne possible choose plainer, less distracting backgrounds. The spindles "growing" out of her head are less than ideal.
Just my $00.02 worth - your mileage may vary.
~John