Photoshoot I did for an online bakery, C&C please!:)

[Alexandtheng]

any c & c would be great, let me know what you guys think!













this one i did for the same bakery but almost a year ago.

 

[Light Guru]

Other then the girl doesn't look like she is really going to eat the brownie, or even wants to eat the brownie they look fine.

 

[Alexandtheng]

haha how could i have shot it to make it look like she's going to eat the brownie?

cause we all had a heck ton of brownies on the day of the shoot

 

[tirediron]

What are you trying to show with these?

 

[Alexandtheng]

the photos are to be used as online advertisements for the brownie bakery

 

[tirediron]

the photos are to be used as online advertisements for the brownie bakery

I understand the purpose of the work, but what specific message you are trying send the viewer?

 

[Alexandtheng]

i did not think of that actually, this is one my my first shoots. but generally alone the lines of "these brownies are awesome, order from them!"

 

[tirediron]

For me, that message only comes across #2, and then only slightly. In the rest, the pose, her look and manner say to me, "You want me to eat this?" The photography is good (watch details like the placement of the vase in #4), but to me the message totally misses. For brownies, I think happy family, kids, cozy kitchen, NOT a model in a fancy dress on a white leather sofa.

 

[Alexandtheng]

thanks for the tips there are a few things that "need to be said", and i'm eager to hear your thoughts on that as well.

got your point about not getting the message i wanted across. hopefully it'll be something i get a better hang off with more practice.

regarding the choice of model/set up, if you would kindly look to their site [url]www.thebrowniemen.com[/URL] (i hope it's ok for me to put links in here), maybe you can understand why i went with a "model in a fancy dress...." over a family & kids etc? my take on the choice of model/set up was that it fit their "style" somewhat more. of course as i said, this is one of my first jobs, and already it's clear i have a lot to learn. but would you suggest family/kids after looking at their site (assumingof course that you haven't already).

 

[Light Guru]

her look and manner say to me, "You want me to eat this?"

Bingo

For brownies, I think happy family, kids, cozy kitchen, NOT a model in a fancy dress on a white leather sofa.

Double bingo

regarding the choice of model/set up, if you would kindly look to their site

I looked at their site, and there is absolutely nothing there that makes me want a brownie from them. Boxes of brownie mix at the store are more tasty. But that is on them not you.

If you want to sell a brownie from a photo of a person eating a brownie, they person in the photo should at least look like they are enjoying the brownie. If you want to go with the classy sexy woman to sell the brownies then the look on her face should be saying this the the best brownie I have ever had, and no man could ever take the place of these brownies.

 

[Murray Bloom]

I don't mind the model choice, but she appears to be obviously posing to me. The images don't look natural, and as Light Guru wrote, she doesn't look like she actually wants to eat the brownie. There's no hunger or desire there. Also, her hair is uncontrolled, which distracts me a lot. The brownie should be the star, but the shoot seems to concentrate on the girl. The lighting looks okay, although her skin highlights are a bit too bright. A decent attempt, but the set needs a rethink.

 

[Alexandtheng]

that's a lot to think about, and good pointers too, has opened my eyes a good bit

thanks!

 

[DanOstergren]

These look great and seem to be shot well. As far as processing goes, I feel that the brightness can be toned down and it could use a curves adjustment.

My main isue with these is that the focus seems to be on the model, not the brownies. These photos to me don't make me want to eat these brownies at all, and shouldn't that be the point? The focus of these photos to me seems to be all about the models and very little about the brownies. I would like the photos to show detail on the actual product, and the ingredients, as WHY these brownies are good enough for me to purchase them. These photos just aren't selling the brownies because I think they are completely focused on the wrong things.

 

[sashbar]

I am not impressed with images of a girl who looks like throwing out a brownie. I have never ever seen this composition in any food advert and I am sure there is a sold reason for it. A girl with a brownie in her open mouth simply does not look attractive, it sends you a wrong impulse. I think the reason is because if you want to show a process of eating a brownie the most unfortunate or unpleasant moment is when it is stuck in her open mouth. NO girl would want to be seen like this. It might be technically perfect, to me it does not matter, because the idea, in my view is disastrous. When she holds the brownie, it is ok, but Nos 1,3,4 are just wrong as a food advert in my view.
And compositionally - the brownie is tiny ! I would like to seee a close-up portrait of this beautiful girl smiling and holdin a brownie close to her mouth as if the next moment she is going to gobble it, but do nit show the moment itself, it is not aestetically pleasing, show the moment of anticipation.
The shot with the guy I good, but not as a brownie ad, again, it is small and one has to guess what the hell is this brown stuff..

 

[cynicaster]

Where are the photos of her eating the raw eggs that are sitting on that table?