portrait taken with SB600, need your help to improve

[shingfan]

this is from my second portrait section.....please comment on the lighting, color, and crop....or anything else that you can think of....be as picky as possible so that i can learn from your experience...thanks

 

[emogirl]

very well done....i would be inclined to crop off the dead space at left and make it a square format. there is a tiny little curve shine on the bottom edge of her nose to clone out, but other than that...lovely shot...what is your set up with the flash?

 

[shingfan]

thanks a lot for the constructive comment......yes......i crop it to 4x6 for printing to put in album...but i guess as you said a square crop might work better.....or someone suggested that i move the arms further left to fill the space...lol

the setup was a relatively beginner setup......two flashes (the one on the right at 1/1 and the one on the left at 1/4).....one on the right and one on the left...45 degree at the subject about 1.5m away........both were direct flash with diffuser in front to soften the light.....i'll post a picture of my setup on my next session in 2 weeks with another friend