Wow. I don't think I have anything special at all on my blog.
Well here's the thing about using flashes in front of my boys. It would have lit my kitchen up. I was really trying to keep my kitchen dark. Hence looking into the future. The future is dark but the past is bright. I think a really soft flash through a soft box or through the umbrella would have worked.
As far as the touching. It looks ok. Obviously its nothing special, but you have detailed what is possible with proper lighting. I think I could have made it sharper as well.