Exposure and focus looks okay, and as far as crop, I prefer the 2nd because it shows all the young lady's hair. I'm glad John commented because I was struggling to find the words to describe the pose, but "awkward" works. I'm not a big fan of anything close to squared off shoulders on the female form. The hands on the hips accentuates her shoulders making her look to much like a line backer, especially the right shoulder, and looks to be forcing them forward. I am envious of your model though, attractive young lady.