Self portrait (first time flash work) - C&C please

[Judobreaker]

So yeah, I didn't have any flashes (besides the macro flash kit)... Until this Friday.
This is my first try. ^^

C&C more than welcome.

 

[frommrstomommy]

I think its nice overall.. my only two cents are the hair seems sharper than the eyes and that shadow on the neck.

 

[tirediron]

Not bad. I would suggest moving your fill so that it's about 40-50 degrees camera left vice ~90 and dropping it down about 2/3 stop. This will bring some light into your eyes, produce a catchlight, and add a little shadow contrast.

 

[Judobreaker]

I think its nice overall.. my only two cents are the hair seems sharper than the eyes and that shadow on the neck.

That's probably not impossible as it was on full autofocus.
Not sure what the focus points were as I wasn't looking through the viewfinder at the time. xD

 

[Judobreaker]

Not bad. I would suggest moving your fill so that it's about 40-50 degrees camera left vice ~90 and dropping it down about 2/3 stop. This will bring some light into your eyes, produce a catchlight, and add a little shadow contrast.

I'll definitely try this next time.