Writing "About Me" sections are the WORST.

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If your link is "About Me", then you need to write it as first person. If your link is "Who is Emily" or "About the Artist" or "Info", then writing it as third person is acceptable. I personally like writing it as first person. Makes it more personal. Plus it is really a one person operation. I think third person is better if your company has several photographers.
 

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Well, that was short and sweet. :1219:

Guess that Emily isn't one of those wishy-washy indecisive people. :laughing:
 

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I dunno if you're mid-edits or what, but the current text reads:

I strives to provide my clients with a unique and fun experience, whether that be on-location or in the studio. In order to accomplish this, I will meet with you before your session to get to know you and to discuss the vision for your photo shoot. I also works with a team of professionals, including a hair and makeup artist for senior and modern portrait sessions, to make sure you look and feel your best!

Your subject verb agreement ain't happenin', unless you going for a gollum thing. Nasty hobbitses steals my Precious yess they does. Ruin their senior sessionses I will, yess, my preciousssss.
 
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I dunno if you're mid-edits or what, but the current text reads:

I strives to provide my clients with a unique and fun experience, whether that be on-location or in the studio. In order to accomplish this, I will meet with you before your session to get to know you and to discuss the vision for your photo shoot. I also works with a team of professionals, including a hair and makeup artist for senior and modern portrait sessions, to make sure you look and feel your best!

Your subject verb agreement ain't happenin', unless you going for a gollum thing. Nasty hobbitses steals my Precious yess they does. Ruin their senior sessionses I will, yess, my preciousssss.

HAHAHAHAHA.

Awesome, thanks for pointing that out.
 

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Emily Rose McGonigle is a photographer based in Nashville, TN, specializing in fashion senior portrait photography and modern portraiture.

What's "modern portraiture"?

If I'm looking for a photographer to do some portraits, you've lost me, because I don't know what that is.

Emily is a fun-loving individual with a love for music ranging from, The Mars Volta, Mute Math, Colony House, James Bay, and some Pop guilty pleasures as well.

If I'm looking to hire you to shoot portraits, it really doesn't matter to me what music you like. I'm 52 years old and have no idea who any of those bands are. What you need to be concerned with is that I've got money to spend, but nothing about the music you like makes me want to spend it with you.

She enjoys TV and movie comedies, well-written suspense stories, and has a slight (read: major) addiction to social media.

Again, as a potential client, I could care less about what television shows you like, or what books you like to read. You're not hooking me and, more importantly, you're not hooking my wallet.

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I understand not wanting to come across as completely stoic, but I don't think this is even mildly professional.

Your "about me" page is a sales pitch. Approach it as such.
 
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You're not hooking me and, more importantly, you're not hooking my wallet.

That's okay, because as a 52 year old male, you are not my clientele base.

If my previous, long as hell, super-convoluted, "About Me" got me the clients I wanted, this one will do just as fine, if not better. :)

I'm not worried about the content at this point. Just the grammar and the spelling.



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I want to re-do the "about me" section of my website, but I'm sitting here staring at a blank page, because I don't know where to begin.

My last one was way to long-winded and stupid and I'm over it.

I can't find a happy medium between just listing my name, number and email, and actually being slightly personable.

Pfffffffft.

I have *always* been terrible about writing bios. It's literally the WORST.

/mini vent
It's always difficult talking about or writing about yourself, usually better off having someone else or a few other people that know you put words down and then cut and paste the comments. I used what I have done in the past as a photographer and then had a proof reader go through it and make it sound like I knew what I was doing.
 

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That's okay, because as a 52 year old male, you are not my clientele base.

I LOL'ed. :D It's great that you're going after a specific demographic. You're a specialist and not a generalist. IMHO, you can command a higher price point that way.
 

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You're not hooking me and, more importantly, you're not hooking my wallet.

That's okay, because as a 52 year old male, you are not my clientele base.

Really? Who is?

You've just exposed a pretty major flaw in your approach.

Your "client base" shouldn't be comprised of people who like the same books you do, and it shouldn't be comprised of people who like the same television shows you do. It should be comprised of people who have the money to spend on a photographer.

You say you do senior portraits. Who do you think is paying for that? Nine time outta' ten it's not the senior but, rather, the senior's parents. You need to cater to them as much as you need to cater to the student.

You say you do "modern portraiture". Well, if I'm the guy who's writing the check for his kid's senior portrait, then you need to ensure that I know what that is. How does "modern portraiture" differ from any other kind of portraiture? Why do the books you read make a difference to the parent (again, the one who's likely paying you)?
 

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Your "client base" shouldn't be comprised of people who like the same books you do, and it shouldn't be comprised of people who like the same television shows you do. It should be comprised of people who have the money to spend on a photographer.

That's one approach to it, but Emily has another approach. She's trying to relate to the clients which can work really well. I speak from personal experience since I have the same approach and it is working out very well for me.
 
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Your "client base" shouldn't be comprised of people who like the same books you do, and it shouldn't be comprised of people who like the same television shows you do. It should be comprised of people who have the money to spend on a photographer.

That's one approach to it, but Emily has another approach. She's trying to relate to the clients which can work really well. I speak from personal experience since I have the same approach and it is working out very well for me.

And also works well for me.

And "modern portraits" does not refer to the senior sessions. This are an entirely different genre and target clientele. Women, specifically. And all that is gone into detail on a separate page, just like the senior portrait sessions themselves are spelled out on another page.

So thank you for your concern and input, but I don't intend on changing anything at this point.
 

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im just disappointed there was no Modest Mouse in your music list on your page...:(
 

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