You will no doubt have noticed that I did point out what you did right, and then proceeded to what you did not do right, but I can't even tell if you read my remarks, or anyone else's, at this point.
If you want to receive any further critique from me, you should make a clear statement of "yes". Otherwise I will assume that you do not. Your remarks are rather hard to decipher, but I am getting the impression that you don't want any comments or critique.