She really has wonderful eyes. Even in this image, the focus is still on the eyes. If I had to crop the image, I would crop it just above the strap of the dress. That white plastic thing on the strap is distracting.
I happen to like the crop... you dont always need the entire person in a photo... the whole image does not shot case her eyes anywhere near as nice as the edited photo and if thats what you were consontrating on BRAVO good job looks great....