Does this portrait work?

[Bellezzo]

Hellouu, I did this self portrait today, but I'm not sure if it really 'works' - the comp is weird and stuff. I made these two edits of it. What do you think? What should I improve? Thanks for looking and please be kind lol.
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Taken with a nikon d5000

 

[Trever1t]

More please Kidding, they're a bit dark and the face is completely hidden...outfit and pose is interesting but no, these don't work....try again.

 

[Ernicus]

I like the red shoes. Might have been cooler with a red bra to match, instead of the black one. Black kinda gets lost in the dirt/shadows to me.

What are you trying to portray with it? Just being silly and different, or is there a meaning? If there is a meaning...I didn't capture it. If it's just silly n random, then I got that. ;-)

I like the waist to hip ratio the angle portrays as well.

 

[Ernicus]

we also might need a 360 degree animated *.gif to really get a handle on it. :-D

 

[Bellezzo]

Haha thank you for the advice. And well, it was kind of a random shot... because I was actually wearing a dress at first, but it looked weird to me, so I took it off. But thanks!

 

[Ernicus]

Haha thank you for the advice. And well, it was kind of a random shot... because I was actually wearing a dress at first, but it looked weird to me, so I took it off. But thanks!

I like the spirit and freedom. That definitely shows in the photo. Not 'cause your'e half naked, but you seem relaxed and comfy.

That would explain the hose too, lol.

 

[gopal]

u mentioned self portrait.......Does any self portrait made without showing the face?....Who knows who is behind hands?...I liked diagonal posture...thnx

 

[Bellezzo]

Thank you Ernicus, as long as I captured something he he.

 

[Designer]

Photographers' self portraits are often "off the wall", so to speak, and if this is yours, then so be it. Do more, please!

 

[rgregory1965]

Would work as a crime scene shot....lol

 

[davisphotos]

It's rather intriguing to me, a bit dark, seems like a good start to some sort of a narrative, although I'm not sure what that story might be. Definitely has a crime scene feel to it.

 

[Trever1t]

Viewed full-size it's way more interesting

 

[Bellezzo]

Thanks again - the shots I took made myself think of a crime scene too actually. Think I have to give it another try.

 

[Ernicus]

Please do.

 

[DiskoJoe]

Now who just went and left this poor little white girl out in the woods. She looks famished. Go get her a sandwich.