Looking for Harsh Abuse and Criticism

[kundalini]

mute point; wasn't in the letter.

[h=2]mute[/h]/myut/ Show Spelled [myoot] adjective, mut·er, mut·est.
1. silent; refraining from speech or utterance.
2. not emitting or having sound of any kind.
3. incapable of speech; dumb.
4. (of letters) silent; not pronounced.
5. Law. (of a person who has been arraigned) making no plea or giving an irrelevant response when arraigned, or refusing to stand trial (used chiefly in the phrase to stand mute ).




[h=2]moot[/h][SUP]1 [/SUP]/mut/ Show Spelled [moot] adjective
1. open to discussion or debate; debatable; doubtful: a moot point.
2. of little or no practical value or meaning; purely academic.
3. Chiefly Law. not actual; theoretical; hypothetical.

verb (used with object) 4. to present or introduce (any point, subject, project, etc.) for discussion.
5. to reduce or remove the practical significance of; make purely theoretical or academic.
6. Archaic. to argue (a case), especially in a mock court.





The point is to be careful with the words AND spelling in correspondence to those you wish to elicit a positive response.

 

[ratssass]

HA-HAAAAAAA...........Owned by both the grammar and the spelling police!!!Nice catch Kun-dog....
Back to the BDSM forums for you,Brainiac.............lololol

 

[tirediron]

mute point; wasn't in the letter.

"Moot point" mebbe?

 

[ratssass]

FWIW....I liked both Tirediron and Lenny's format.....just seems more professional/appropriate.

 

[manicmike]

mute point; wasn't in the letter.

"Moot point" mebbe?

It's Moo point. :mrgreen:

 

[JTPhotography]

If you're serious about getting this book published, it doesn't seem very smart to me to be sharing the idea online.

 

[Braineack]

you guys missed the joke.

 

[tirediron]

mute point; wasn't in the letter.

"Moot point" mebbe?

It's Moo point. :mrgreen:

Noooooooo... THIS is a moo point!

 

[Derrel]

"Moot point" mebbe?

It's Moo point. :mrgreen:

Noooooooo... THIS is a moo point!

Uhhh-oh....seems like there might be a couple of cases of bovine spongiform encephalopathy 'round these parts... symptoms are already starting to manifest themselves...

...and as for harsh abuse & criticism, I think Mish can dish that out, at least on weekend nights...by appointment, of course, you host, etc.,etc..

 

[cynicaster]

You lost me with the paragraph that starts with "the book is about...". From the perspective of somebody coming in blind and reading the letter, that part just sounds too "out there", IMO. That's not a comment on your book or idea, just a comment on how you're introducing it.

For what it's worth, Tirediron's edit is almost word for word what I would have suggested.

 

[John_Olexa]

I'm working on my first book and even though I'm not at that stage yet, I did search ahead and found this from writersdigest.

How to Write a Query Letter: 10 Dos and Don'ts | WritersDigest.com

 

[robbins.photo]

Ok, harsh abuse and criticism, as requested.

Your ugly. Also, your mother appears to dress you strangely.

hmm.. oh, wait.. you meant on the letter thingy. Oh, ok, there I've got nothing.. lol

I did take a quick glance over the 10 do's and don'ts of writing query letters though and would probably go with that.

 

[manaheim]

Thanks, everyone!

I'll have a look at that link tonight.

Cynicaster, I'm not sure what you mean by what lost you... could you be more specific?

John, that's awesome (and thanks again for the link). Good luck with whatever you're working on.

robbins... lol

 

[manicmike]

FWIW, the book sounds really interesting.

 

[The_Traveler]

A couple of smalls edit but the sentence in red really needs some work; the structure is unbalanced and totally awkward. Maybe actually make this into a paragraph with a couple of sentences. Putting it before the outline of the plot requires the reader to keep a complex abstract in their mind while reading the plot and fitting that abstract into place somehow. I would put it after the plot so that how the themes fit is obvious.

____________________________________________
"Mr./Ms. <Name>:


I have recently completed my second novel, an urban fantasy of approximately 75K words. Based on your involvement with works such as <Example title #1> and <Example title #2>, I think that my novel would be of interest to you. [Set against the backdrop of Christianity, it deals with the themes of determining right from wrong, challenging one’s internal convictions, and the struggle between what we want from life and what we must do as defined by those in power around us. ]
The central character is a career antiquities thief who dies while trying to reform, and finds herself conscripted as the angelic Assassin of God. She must redeem her sins on Earth by dealing with those who have slipped through the mortal justice system. Armed with her experience as a cat burglar, her determination and an ancient Samurai sword she is bound to this role by an onerous contract whose only clear passage tells her in no uncertain terms that failure in her duty to God means banishment to hell, despite her intense conviction against killing and her terror of flying.

There are obviously multiple themes: the struggle to determine right from wrong and to challenge one's deeply held convictions, the need to clarify what life's real goals should be and how to balance that against the requirements imposed upon us. These conflicts are played out against a background of a deeply Christian conviction.

I was a technical editor for Microsoft Press responsible for thirteen books. I have also written several professional articles for a trade publication and have completed one other novel.

Thank you for your time and I look forward to hearing from you."