Shoot for my daughter's 16s

[Rosy]

Hi

Jackie finally agreed to take these, please cc where needed, appreciate your time

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[tirediron]

Must be nice to have a built-in model! A couple of thoughts for improvement: The position of the knee in the first two is a bit awkward; it looks like someone else's leg, and the crop down the lateral axis of the left arm is less than ideal. Also, watch the details; two seconds to run a comb through her hair would have made a world of difference, especially image left (and is that a processing artefact near her forehead just the right of the part?). The pose in #3 is nice, but converting to monochrome is costing a lot of detail in the black trousers.

These are a nice start, with just a little posing refinement, and maybe a touch of fill just to bring out the light in her eyes a little more, these could be great! Definitely practice some more!

Just my $00.02 worth - your mileage may vary.

~John

 

[Rosy]

thank you for your time John

 

[julianliu]

I like little light shine on her hair, without the obvious light spot would be even better... The Bokeh looks nice ... The leg in the pic is distracting, need a different pose ... Nice smile !

 

[Rosy]

Sorry for the double entry

here are several more

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[Tinderbox (UK)]

All but the last two photo`s look fuzzy, is it just me?

John.

 

[Rosy]

nope you are right I added a blur on those and tried to keep the eyes sharpened

 

[Designer]

All but the last two photo`s look fuzzy, is it just me?

John.

I usually don't comment on the softness or lack of focus, but that is the first thing I thought as well.

Then, I had to see more pictures before I realized that the top of her boot is showing and now I know what it is.

Not sure I like the knee pulled up into the frame when we don't see enough of the model to catch the complete pose.

 

[cgipson1]

Rosy.. look good except for the blur... too soft!

 

[Rosy]

Yep Charlie it's a STUPID action i went crazy for.
THANK YOU - hope you are doing well!

 

[DiskoJoe]

Rosy.. look good except for the blur... too soft!

I wasnt digging that either. Looks like a holga wanna be effect.

 

[DiskoJoe]

All but the last two photo`s look fuzzy, is it just me?

John.

I usually don't comment on the softness or lack of focus, but that is the first thing I thought as well.

Then, I had to see more pictures before I realized that the top of her boot is showing and now I know what it is.

Not sure I like the knee pulled up into the frame when we don't see enough of the model to catch the complete pose.

If you click the photo to see the full size the face is in good focus.

 

[Rosy]

yep - the blur was an action I downloaded but I masked the eyes

thanks to all for your feedback

you guys are great for taking the time and helping one improve

 

[D-B-J]

I personally hate the blur, but like the last two shots. Selective blur like that reminds me of my friends who bought a dslr and now think they are photography pro's. Not that this is the case with you, but that's what it makes me think of.

Regards,
Jake

 

[cgipson1]

yep - the blur was an action I downloaded but I masked the eyes

thanks to all for your feedback

you guys are great for taking the time and helping one improve

I like helpin you purdy ladies... but am told I am less charitable with ugly guys! lol! (Gee.. wonder why!) :hug::