2 from model shoot

[shortpants]

C&C please!

This was rough, she was very shy at first and it took a while for us to both get comfortable together. It was her first time ever even attempting to model, and I've only done maybe 2 model shoots a million years ago and they sucked. It was hard to direct her at first. Once we did start getting more relaxed she had to leave! I have a few outfit/location changes but I'm still editing, so I'm starting with these. She was definitely not feeling it yet in these but I would love C&C if these are even worth it to give to her. It was a great learning experience for both of us. She's beautiful and I wish she wasn't moving so we could work together again.

Problems the entire shoot: One flash malfunctioning, rain off and on, mosquitoes eating us alive and crazy humidity messing up her hair and makeup. Plus I was having focusing issues with this lens (sigma 70-300 4:5.6)

ok here goes.

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2. got a little soft in photobucket.

Also I need to get rid of the tan lines on her neck. ETA: I also think the pose is awkward and I'm thinking of cropping this for a head and shoulders shot.

 

[tirediron]

C&C per req:

1. It seems the focus here was on the red pattern of her dress around chest level not her eyes. Her hand positioning seems a little awkward (always try and have the fingers tight together), and the angle she's got her head at and having her neck out-stretched like that almost makes it seem like she has a slight jaw malformation.

2. Badly off-level and needs more fill light image left. Overall it's a nice shot, but it makes me want to know what she's looking at.

Just my $00.02 worth - your mileage may vary.

~John

 

[shortpants]

Thank you for the feedback, agreed with the fill light and tilt in 2. I think I got thrown off with the slope and curve of the yard.
I'm not seeing what you're seeing with the jawline though.

 

[shortpants]

another edit of 2.

adding 3.

 

[kundalini]

#1 - You're very close to an up-skirt shot.... Oops! A couple of suggestions. The legs in tandem are rather boring. Try having her extend the rearward leg or have the forward leg cross over the other at the ankle and higher the the rearward ankle. The two hands together are causing her to roll her shoulders forward. Try one hand on the forward knee and the other either strecthed forward to the sane side ankle or behind her bottom. Also, try to avoid hands (especially female hands) square to the camera. A profile view is much more pleasing. As is, she is very rigid. Think about creating lines, which equates to more dynamics, which results in better photographs.

Her eyes should be following her nose rather than off in a distance somewhere. I know you you are shooting outdoors, but get in her spot and look around. Find for her a focus point. It could be a tree limb, a barn half a mile away, something, anything that she can consistantly hit the mark.

And John is correct. Focus point on #1 is on the dress, not the eyes.

 

[shortpants]

Thank you kundalini. I was really trying to keep your tips in mind from my last thread but so much went out the window! It's like I know flattering modeling poses, and all the things that look awkward and wrong, but can't seem to get it together while shooting.
ugh the up the skirt shot, I was hoping it wouldn't be too noticeable

I do have a few shots with her sitting with one leg extended, I'll try to get them up later. They're still not what I wanted to go for. She did relax more toward the end. I had a lot of awkward hands and feet though.

She was looking at our friend a lot. It was also confusing her because our friend kept trying to direct while I was. I just had to shoot or we would have been there all night going back and forth.

I know none of these are stellar shots, I just hope I can at least give her something useable.

 

[shortpants]

Any better, or am I grasping at straws?

 

[tropicalwishes]

I like this last one the best! It's like woods fairy.
Try to get the model to smile, it makes every picture better. Maybe have her roll her shoulders back so it's more flattering. Try to find ways to make the shoot more fun/entertaining to get her flirting with the camera a little more. If you're tense, she will be too.
There's definitely potential, just keep practicing.