First 'Model' Shoot

[pkae1989]

I am pretty excited about this shoot I did last Tuesday. Enjoy and let me know your thoughts!

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[Robin Usagani]

I think my main dislike is the post processing. I cant pass trough that. I kinda like #1 though.

 

[pkae1989]

I really didn't do too much with #3, but thank you for your opinion.

 

[RauschPhotography]

I don't really have a problem with the post processing--I think it works on these shots. I think #3 would look great in B&W #4 is my favorite of the set. Thanks for sharing!

 

[VegasPhotoNut]

I love #1, its awesome! the rest of the set is great!

 

[tirediron]

Thoughts per req:

1. I like this, but I think the reflections in the ball are just too strong. A different angle might have reduced them to the point where she wasn't so obscured.

2. Again the reflections aren't working for me. I would level this and crop one side or the other to mover her out of the centre of the image.

3. I think this should have been shot in portrait (vertical) orientation and leveled. The angle really does nothing for the image IMO.

4. In this case, the angle is extreme enough to appear deliberate (but I'm still not a fan). The use of graduated ND and polarizing filters would have enhanced the sky and water and made for a much stronger image. Again, she's a little too centred.

Overall, they're a nice enough set with some minor technical issues which, for the most part are easily fixed.

Just my $00.02 worth - your mileage may vary

~John

 

[Raian-san]

I like #1 and #3. I think #3 outfit and the thing on her hair really match with the train, building, vintage look. Now I think if you go and edit #3 and de-saturated to make it vintage or even B&W, it'll be nice.

 

[Bitter Jeweler]

Can I post a crop of #4?

 

[pkae1989]

Be my guest.

 

[Bitter Jeweler]

Thanks!

I didnt care for her centered, small, and with the angle as a landscape, BUT, I kinda dig it in portrait. How about you?I like how changing a little something can help something else work. In my opinion, of course.

 

[pkae1989]

I do like it, thanks! I guess I shouldn't fear cropping!

 

[Bitter Jeweler]

You're welcome.

There are times that small people in the frame/composition work, and add to a story of feel. I just felt with this image, she needed to play a larger role.

Always play with cropping. Look for different compositions within what you caught. It will help you process possibilities in your mind, in the field.

 

[pkae1989]

No comments for the first 2?

 

[rlemert]

#1 is certainly an interesting idea, but the reflections completely wash out her eyes so I feel like "why bother"

#2 has that vintage roadside diner look, but once again the reflections get in the way of the subject

#3 is my favorite, but it's still not quite there. Her gaze, her expression, and her arm position make it look like she isn't even aware of the train in front of her. Change these, and there are all sorts of stories this picture could tell.

- a look of sorrow would suggest a departing lover
- a look of anticipation would suggest the lover's return
- a more wistful look might suggest a desire to run away from something

#4 - I like bitter's crop - it makes a more powerful image

 

[Bitter Jeweler]

I almost like the first one. It's a fun idea, and a fun image. But she is so washed out, that I keep looking at the stuff in the window reflections. Squint at the image and tell me what stands out more?

The fluorescent light panel above her head in the second image, draws me away from her. You could clone that out, and nobody would b the wiser, maybe.
That aside, I wish she weren't looking straight at the camera. I lock her gaze, then look at the light, then her eyes again. I think the framing is fun, but I have to force myself to look at the ice cream cones. Where, I think if she were looking to the our right a little, it would help our eyes investigate the rest of the image a bit more.


I think you have some very creative ideas, but you need to work on developing your sense of composition and tighten it up.